Today all the groups assessed each others work, to acknowledge the flaws in the scripts. Us, group 44 decides that group 43's script was too long for the two minute criteria, whilst group 45's was too long.
The criticisms we encountered were that our script could involve more detailed stage directions, we made the rectifications to the script and saved.
this is the script:
Betrayal
Opening scene – gangsters hide out
Calvin and Dean enter a room with black walls, no windows and two thick doors inside the room is Tina sitting on a chair waiting for the two of them.
Tina
(Ordering)
I need you two to take care of something for me. There’s this group of kids who owe me a lot of money. They shouldn’t be a problem for you two.
Dean
(In a deep rough voice)
What would you want us to do?
Tina
I want you to bring them to me unharmed if possible.
Calvin
Consider it done.
Tina Smirks in acknowledgement
Next scene – Reigate just outside Martins co-op store it’s a mildly warm sunny day in the middle of Spring Max, Laura and mark exit the shop with snacks heading towards the castle grounds.
Max
Hey Laura you going to Chris’s party tonight?
(Max says this whilst eating a chocolate bar)
Laura
Yeah i'm going but I’ll be a bit late, got work first
(Laura converses with Max whilst crossing the road)
Max
Cool, what about you Mark, you goanna come tonight?
Mark
Haven’t been invited don’t really know Chris. I’ll probably end up going anyway.
Scene changes to Castle ground alley entrance as the three of them approach the grounds Calvin and Dean confront them.
Dean
How’d you buy them snacks? Tina said you couldn’t afford to pay her back the money you owe
Calvin
I’m sure they have our money. Come on, cough up
Max
(In a worrying tone)
I’m sorry mate we haven’t got it on us, we need more time.
Dean
Yeah, yeah heard it all before now give us it!
(Dean cracks his knuckles)
Mark
(In an annoyed tone)
Oi didn’t you hear him he said we don’t have it on us.
Dean
(Smirks)
Well your goanna have to pay someway, somehow.
(Dean grabs the scruff of Marks hoodie and slams him into the wall)
Mark
(In an angry and nervous tone)
Piss off!
(Mark punches dean in the side of the face knocking him to the ground then looks at Max as if asking what to do now)
Max
(Nervous and excited tone)
Fuck it run!
(Max and Laura run in one direction and Mark runs in the other. Dean gets up rubbing his cheek where he was hit looking at Mark running away, he then looks at Calvin
Dean
You go after those two this ones mine
(Dean sprints after Mark)
Calvin
All right meet back here when you’re done
(Calvin sprints after Max and Laura)
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